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Sports do not benefit school children. Do you agree?

#sports #benefit #school #children
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Some people think that sports are not important for children because
childhood
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 is playtime. It
also
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 results in children not having a healthy
body
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 for their
future
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. In my opinion, I disagree about the topic due to I firmly believe that sports can make children have a healthy
body
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, and
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 can build
cooperation
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 and
leadership
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 with their friends.
To begin
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 with, the children must be doing sport to make their
body
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 healthy. As we know
childhood
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 the
body
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 children have weak durability and even easily contracting diseases.
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, their parents or teacher
have
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has
 to make them do exercises in daily life.
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, children do jogging or go swimming every week for practice their exercise habits since
childhood
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.
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, the children must routinely do sports for their bodies. Another point, in doing sports we be trained to build
cooperation
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 and sportsmanship with a friend.
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, soft skills are most important for our
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future
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future, such
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 as
cooperation
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,
leadership
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, suitability, and the other.
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, we should train all those soft skills since
childhood
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.
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, many children do not know the importance of
cooperation
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 and
leadership
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 in the
future
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. To conclude, it is
certainly
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certain
 there are many benefits in doing sports for school children due to can make a healthy
body
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 and
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 have much soft skill
such
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 as
cooperation
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 and
leadership
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. These two useful points can make school children more healthy and useful for their
future
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.
Submitted by Hadi Dzikrullah on

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