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The problems of animal and plants are more important.What are causes of this? What are the solution

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In recent years, the extinction of animals and plants remains the biggest headache and causes worldwide concern.Some people tend to treat it as a persistent problem.There are some factors that account for why
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 has happened.To the best of my knowledge,
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 situation should be probed and provided well-grounded steps. People should
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 recognise that progressive fall in living species on the planet is attributed to human's interests. A specifically notable example is that many animal-based experiments are conducted for the development of cosmetics. It appears that
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 form of researches can bring overpopulation of animals and ruin the sustainability of an ecosystem. Another potential reason is that many domestic animals are butchered for human consumption and people become addicted to meat consumption.Some scientists argue that people's insatiable desire for meat can lead to exponential animal slaughter.In
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 situation, it has far-reaching impacts on the well-being of animals. When it comes to plants, people hold the view that people's greater appetite for comfort and enjoyment life is a root cause of
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 issue.The hypothesis is that to keep abreast of the 21st century, people tend to buy fashionable and stylish wood products
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 as furniture which is made from trees. It is apparent that it causes to over-logging and lumber harvesting. From the preceding discussion, one can subscribe to the notion that the problem of mass extinction of species, either plants or animals, is the result of people's an over-growing demand for meat or food and luxury lifestyle.
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, as opposed to
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 type of general pessimism,
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 issue can be remedied, if people rethought the meaning and perception of ecology.I strongly believe that
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 little step will avoid animal exploitation and ecological degradation.
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