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In some country owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Negative and positive sides?

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Nowadays people are able to choose between renting and buying a flat or a
house
, but in some countries populations find owning a household is a major thing.
Home
Suggestion
A home
 represents a place which provides safety and comfort. There are different opinions, some people think they should own a
house
. I believe that there are a few good reasons. Being the owner of
house
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the house
 or flat gives people independence, they will always have a living place, no one will ask them to move out.
Also
, when human beings own a property they are able to renovate and decorate in the way they want. Not only do not they pay the rent, but
also
 they can choose will they buy and use solar panels to get energy or will they other sources. One more example is that when
person
 have a
house
 or flat, he can start to run a business, Once when
person
Suggestion
a person
the person
buy
Suggestion
buys
 a household, he can rent it to another
person
 and gain money. On the other side, some negative sides are
possible especially
Accept comma addition
possible, especially
 these years, when climate changes affect our world more. As
example
Suggestion
an example
, hurricanes and tsunamis could bring much harm and damage
to buildings and constructions
Suggestion
buildings and constructions
, in that case people maybe will not have enough resources to refurbish and make a new home.
Next
 to it, renting a
house
 always provides an opportunity to change living area whenever
person
 want to. In conclusion, in our century people are
faced
produced by or subjected to forcing
forced
 to many changes and insecurity. Owning a home is a one thing that no one can take from us and after
work
Suggestion
the work
 day or holiday, the best thing is that human being
have
Suggestion
has
 a place which
fulfills
put in effect
fulfils
 him with peace.
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