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Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

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The government of every nation places a significant role in their provincial. Some people reckon that higher authorities should provide facilities for people who are below the poverty line and who does not have any job. I totally agree with
this
 statement because the government is fully responsible for the conditions of their citizens. Why some people reckon that
country
's administration should provide all the facilities to the homeless people? Primarily, the
first
 reason is ruler of each nation is charging high rate of direct and indirect taxes from their residents on their incomes. So it the primary responsibility of the government to provide all amenities to poor as well as middle class people
such
 as facilities of proper food, shelter, jobs et cetera.
For example
, in India the annual budget for
country's financial year
Suggestion
the country's financial year
a country's financial year
country's financial years
 is approximately 1.2 trillion dollars in which major proportion has come through taxes.
Therefore
, it's the duty of Indian administration to do some worthy of the local people who are unable to eat one time meal.
Moreover
, in a democratic
country
 every citizen have
right
Suggestion
the right
 to vote and select their own favourite candidate in the field of politics.
In other words
, the people have power and they are able to choose their own state. So they should have
right
 to get all the basic facilities
such
 as a better employment proper food and shelter for their families from the local union.
For example
, India is a democratic
country
 and 135 million people choose their own ruler after every 5 years. All people, whoever belongs to any class have
right
Suggestion
the right
a right
 to vote for their candidate.
Hence
, the people have full
right
 to get basic facilities from their ministry. To sum up,
country
's administration plays the role as a king of the nation.
Although
, people should work hard to earn all amenities in their life, the power should responsible for them.
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