Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some men and women believe that, it is more beneficial to motivate the kids for
competition
. While others feel
that is
better to become children supportive
in contrast
of rivalry. I feel that the championships are important for pupils’ to become smart and practical. But, cooperate is more important rather than compete, because it will helpful for them like, teamwork, class project, internship, group discussion, etc.
First
of all, numbers of people are frequently argued that the competitive natures are very helping for the kids. The reason behind it, when the children take a part in any
competition
they will learn a lot of real life things and develop a skill to face challenges.
For example
, my friend has a stage fear. But,
last
year he was participating in dance
competition
program which is organized in our school.
Initially
, he has heisted.
Although
, his team members’ encouraged him and he was successfully completed his dance. The
next
argue is that taught the cooperation is most important to compare the development of
competition
sense into the pupils.
Also
, I think that learn of cooperative behaviour to girls and boys are more beneficial. Because, when younger have a supportive attitude they will be able to working with the team and strangers
also
.
This
skill will help them to make their career as well as personal life like, making a friend, work with the team, communication with unknown people, etc.
for
Suggestion
For
instance, by the
last
month’s article of times of India newspaper, the figure is described more than 90% company hired those people who have teamwork ability. In conclusion, I feel that the value of cooperation is more useful for pupils to become a better human beings, rather than encouragement for the tournament.
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