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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from
home
. Nowadays, the concept of telecommuting has appeared around the world.
Such
 a phenomenon generates a great deal of debate among people.
This
 essay carried out an investigation into both merits and demerits of working at
home
. Looking at the issue from a positive perspective, it has several benefits for employees, the most important of which is flexible
time
. For the sake of being at
home
 all the
time
, workers are able to spend more
time
 with their children.
This
 type of working helps parents who prefer homeschooling and do not want their children to educate at schools. Working from
home
 allowed people to
work
 at times they
work
 more efficiently,
for instance
, some people are early person and prefer to
work
 in the morning, whereas others prefer to
work
 at nights. The
next
 mentionable point of advantage is decreasing the amount of polluted in the air. Telecommuters don not have to go to a special place to
work
 and it has a considerable influence on the reduction in traffic in big cities; as a consequence, air pollution is decreased.
However
,
this
 way of working has two salient downsides. Lack of social communication is considered as the
first
 issue. Due to spending much
time
 at
home
, commuters lead to a sense of isolation, while in the traditional type of working there is an interaction between colleagues. Another detrimental side could be creativity's declining. People who
work
 at
home
 do not possess of the opportunity of taking apart a group of workers that has an effect on creativity of stuffs. To conclude, the reduction in air pollution and spending more
time
 with children along with lack of social communicate and creativity's decreasing can be noticed as the virtues and vices, respectively. Altogether, owing to technology's growing, the growth of
this
 type of
work
 is unavoidable.
Submitted by maryam on

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