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Some products can be made quickly by a machine. Other items take a long time to be made by hand. As a buyer, which do you prefer and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer

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Ever since the industrial revolution began, there is always an ongoing debate between handmade products and
machine
 made products. Some commentators argue that there is an equal amount of customers who prefer both products based on their requirements.
This
 essay will explain both sides, by taking examples from different study articles.
To begin
 with, handmade products are always considered as skill work, because it shows the craftman's dedication to deliver the best output. Products like sarees, jewellery and homemade decorative items need a proper finishing, so handmade work can only reach that precision. The recent survey run by, The Times Magazine revealed that customers are more likely to prefer handmade goods when comes to display in the house.
As a result
, it is conclusively clear that handmade goods can take people's attention.
Secondly
, mass production is extremely easy to
machine
 made. There are few products which can meet customer requirements only through
machine
,
for example
, producing
designed
Suggestion
designs
 products with accurate precision is only possible with
machine
, because the detailed cutting at the edges or in corners is only possible with
machine
Suggestion
the machine
. In the same way,
machine
 made products can be replaced easily and faster when there is a damage. The recent article by The New York Times shows that customers choose a
machine
 made products for household equipments,
this
 is because they are more durable than handmade. In conclusion, I firmly believe that customers have different expectation and choices about the products they choose.
Thus both
Accept comma addition
Thus, both
 handmade and
machine
 made products had equal demand based on customer requirement.
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