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As countries have developed, there has been a trend toward smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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The family size in most countries has been getting smaller according to a progress of countries developing.
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 and more educated women. There are surely some of the possible effects it will have on society. One of the principal reasons for smaller family units might be
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. Due to the fact that when a country develops, it becomes richer.
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 of
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 there is a rise in the number of medical clinics,
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 people can choose family size and
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 becomes more readily available. Another significant factor might be the rise in the number of educated
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 as a country develops, which leads to the situation that women are more likely to be working.
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, many will want to delay having children and so will likely have fewer in the long-term.
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, there are positives and negative impacts on the community. One positive effect is that the population will fall, which will likely result in less poverty as there will be less competition for scarce resources.
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, parents can provide better education for their children as it will cost less and benefit humanity as a whole. A possible negative impact could be the existence of few young
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 affect economic growth and leads to less flourishing companies. To conclude, family size has fallen due to
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 and education.
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 has positive and negative influences on society, as it brings less poverty as a benefit and less workforce as a drawback.
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