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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Every year, many people travel to another
country
 for vacation or business. We have some tourist that they come from foreign countries which know with culture and custom on that there. And
also
, other tourist are from our
country
 that the number of
this
 group always is more. In my opinion, each state needs visitor to see there. In
this
 article, I want to express my own idea and which idea can more practical for the development of that
country
. A group of people visit other
country
 twice a year. They would like to see historical buildings, events, custom, culture and so on. Because of
this
, they come with themselves money and it leads to improve on it. So, that government can build its
country
.
For example
: Dubai, it can attract a lot of visitors and with the currency comes in there to improve. I think,
this
 new can affect the industry of that
country
instead
 we charge local visitors.
On the other hand
, people of that
country
 educate in there till for a long time, they can work and build its life and they want from the government to give them a variety service.
For instance
, if we always charge a foreign visitor, it might citizens move to another
country
. So
this
 happen can be really important for the future of that
country
. In conclusion, people travel and visit countries for various reasons. That can be citizens or foreign visitors.
Thus
, some countries have not service to enough its citizens. I think. We should balance both of them views.
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