There are many ways of preventing crime that are much better than prison. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

It is commonly believed that imprisonment is
ineffective method
Suggestion
an ineffective method
to eliminate criminality. I completely agree with
this
statement since prisons have their high-cost demerits, while other methods can efficiently be applied for
this
purpose. Prison has serious drawbacks that do not let it be
effective way
Suggestion
an effective way
of preventing
crime
.
Firstly
, the environment in prisons is often conducive to criminalization rather than rehabilitation. Inmates are put together almost regardless of the seriousness of
crime
they have committed, which allows non-violent offenders to interact with other serial criminals and repeat offenders,
thus
encouraging more criminal intentions.
Secondly
, the government
need
Suggestion
needs
to allocate a large sum of money to prisons. Because criminals have only
negligible contribution
Suggestion
a negligible contribution
themselves to expenditure on food, cloth and health care in prisons. Apart from that, related to the
second
notion, several countries
such
as the USA have released some criminals earlier than usual to avoid the problems of overcrowding and poor conditions in prisons.
This
, on its own way, gives the chance to offenders to carry on their offensive lifestyle. According to the latest statistics, almost 40% of people leaving prison will
reoffend
money returned to a payer
refund
and be back in prison within three years of their release. So, it is clear that it is about time that we considered alternative punishments. Other punitive methods,
however
, including community service and death penalty as well as proper education about crimes can be helpful to reduce
crime
considerably. The reason why community service is operative factor is that it makes offenders useful and repay their communities, avoids the high cost and overcrowding of prisons as well as protecting them from negative influence that jails usually have. In terms of capital punishment, the fear of death can deter people from committing serious felonies
such
as murder, treason or trespassing.
Furthermore
, criminals involved in terrorism or human trafficking, who might kill hundreds of innocent people, cannot pose a threat any more. It
also
holds certain efficiency to educate everyone, especially young people, about the importance of respecting the laws of society and severe consequences of breaking laws that
government
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the government
has brought in for public safety and betterment. All in all, measures should be taken in order so as to make people aware of the consequences of
crime
. To conclude, my view is that governments should consider the negative impacts that imprisonment has as well as implement other efficient ways of eradicating
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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