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Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion

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Following a specific Dress code for schools is a key to negate
social pressure
Suggestion
the social pressure
 among students and provide a sense of equality,
however
, motivate children to work harder for their studies rather than upsetting for daily outfits. Opponents claim, that, wearing a same
uniform
 have no benefit, whereas, could impact on
expressive
Suggestion
expression
 and learning abilities of a child. I personally support
this
 idea of equality among students.
This
 essay will discuss both aspects.
Firstly
, I will discuss that how
uniform
 could attain a positive environment in an organization. School and College is a place of learning where
number
Suggestion
a number
 of people come from different localities. Every student does not hold a strong modern background.
Thus
uniform
Suggestion
the uniform
 is the sole solution to avoid the differences among
upper and lower class
Suggestion
the upper and lower class
upper and lower classes
. To illustrate, financial and background of
family
Suggestion
the family
 could not judge able by wearing similar attire.
it
Suggestion
It
 creates a harmony and
sense
Suggestion
a sense
 of equality among children.
On the contrary
, some parents find it a daily challenge to force their child to wear a same dress. That creates a boring and unattractive environment. Trying new styles at school gives them
platform
Suggestion
a platform
the platform
 to present themselves in
more accurate way
Suggestion
a more accurate way
 that eventually helps in their character building.
For instance
, Student’s excitement can be seen during sports and cultural weeks. To conclude
,
Accept space
,
uniform
 has plenty of positive effects to cope with discrimination among students, but to avoid the bore-some schools should set one day as a free
colour
Suggestion
colourful
 day.
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