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Television entertains, but can it also educate? Do you agree?

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We live in an age when many of us spend hours of our days watching TV, but some people ask, is it possible to learn while you watch a show? For me, it is, and here is why. In the
first
 place, television is everywhere. Almost every house in
this
 world has a television,
this
 makes it a great
way
 to share
information
, because most of people has access to it. So, if educational
information
were transmitted
Suggestion
was transmitted
 by it, it would reach most of the world.
Secondly
, Television grabs attention. People tend to pay more attention to something attractive, like a cartoon with a nice animation, than to someone just speaking. So, if
information
 was transmitted in an attractive
way
, people will listen to it.
However
, it is easy to get bored. Even if the show has an interesting
way
 of teaching, people will prefer watching a series or a movie, that have more interest
on
Suggestion
in
, so they will just change the channel. All in all, while people can get bored, television is a great
way
 to share
information
 and grab attention. And
that is
 why I think it can educate.
Submitted by Alejandra Guaymás on

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