Prison in the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you Agree or disagree?

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It is believed that Imprisonment is the most way to punish criminals, but some people think that offenders should be training. In my opinion, While I accept that education is a more effective solution to handle
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problem, I
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think that imprisonment is an important role in preventing crime It is evident that imprisonment has a huge array of benefits.
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, it ensures the safety of other citizens. Because it helps prevent potential criminals from engaging in serious
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as robbery or murder, which pose a serious threat to the community.
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, receiving capital punishment help prevents offenders from re-offending after release back into society. Because they fear of receiving a prison sentence.
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, in my country, a lot of lawbreaker made a fresh start
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, I think that schooling plays a vital role in studying criminals.
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governments could be sent them to reform school with a target of avoiding breed resentment during their time imprison.
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, central authorities should create rehabilitation programmes, which will provide a tremendous amount of information and vocational training for lawbreakers with an aim of integrating into society.
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, having several causes of crime is a lack of training to family. Because parents spend less time taking care of their children, making children without parental care and monitoring. As a results, children spend a lot of time with their friend and engage in criminal activities
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as shoplifting or dug abuse due to peer pressues  In co
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a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
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, I totally that offences behind bars is effective way to prevent commit a crime, but I
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believe that schooling brings a lot of benefits for offendes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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