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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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These days, people prefer to spend their spare time in online in spite of going out and
communicating
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Communicating
 with local peoples. For individuals it seems to be a positive effect that
they
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They
 can connect with various people in
globally but
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globally, but
 these people forgetting to socialize
with
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With
 the local communities, which means
negitive effect
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a negative effect
negative effect
 on society. Regarding the
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 of communicating online, it connects people globally, and
also
 had a
chances
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chance
 of learning various cultures from
place
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the place
a place
places
 where you are, without moving.
for
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For
 instance- online applications like
facebook
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Facebook
 and
instagram
 have an ability to add friends
from
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From
 different areas, who may have common
instrests
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interests
, not only we can share their feelings but
also
 comment the ideas.
Inaddition
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In addition
 to
this
, it makes easy to get the information, while before the technology development, it was harder to find information
and
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And
 communicate.
On the other hand
, impact of
socialize
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socializing
socialized
onile
and nothing more
only
 have
negitive effect
Suggestion
a negative effect
negative effect
negative effects
 on
socities
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
societies
. Since
every one
all people
everyone
 staying in online, it
became
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has become
 difficult to find time to spend with local
communites
a group of people living in a particular local area
communities
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
people
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People
 are forgetting to go out and work in local
communites
a group of people living in a particular local area
communities
.
Furthermore
, spending time with totally strangers, which they never saw them face to face and
also
 unlikely to meet them in the future. To sum up
w
Accept space
,
ith ,event
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even though
hough there are
some ben
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
ifits
for individual
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individuals, but
s
refers to the speaker or writer
I
but i see
more neg
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
itive effects on society and local communities
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