Nowadays, people spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their workplace. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

People
now use to spend more
time
in their offices and
due to
this
they are not able to spend enough
time
at home. In
this
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we will discuss
positives
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the positives
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of
this
, which can be
promotion
chances
and more
earning
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earnings
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, and
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the
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negatives of
this
such
as not
enough
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having enough
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time
to
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family and becoming less social. Let's begin with the advantages. It is proven that highly skilled
people
get their promotions quickly. Overtime gives a chance to employee to
brush-up
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brush up
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their
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skill set;
consequently
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they learn more and get promoted easily as compared to others.
Secondly
, a worker who has
the
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more
skill
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skills
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can earn more. Every company looking for
a
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employee who is
experenced
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experienced
and
more
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has more
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knowledge of any specific work and
work
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long hours. These organization often agrees to pay more salary to
such
workers as well. So a
person
who works more can earn more as well.
For example
, in India, many peoples
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in 2 shifts to earn more money. more
time
, brush up their skills,
high
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skill set is essential to survive in
this
competetive
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competitive
world more
time
,
people
will learn more and high
chances
of
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promotion
Let's begin with advantages of spending more
time
in office. It is scientifically proven that a
person
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enironment
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environment
playsOffice is the place
when
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where
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a
person
can
consentarte
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concentrate
more
. .
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Another advantage of spending more
time
in
office
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the office
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is
get
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to get
getting
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promotion
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a promotion
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quickly.
People
who spend more
time
in
office
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the office
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are generally spend
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their
time
in
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apply
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learning. A
person
with High skillset has
bright
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their
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apply
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chances
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to get promoted as well. On the flip side, there are disadvantages of adv better
oportunity
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opportunity
to learn and brush-up skills as we are working more, learn more fair and bright
chances
of
promotion
disadvantages no
time
spend with family
specially
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children so no social life left, no
frinds
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friends
and when needed no one is there to help.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career progression
  • earning potential
  • enhanced productivity
  • skill sets
  • work-life balance
  • personal well-being
  • negatively impacting
  • increased stress
  • health issues
  • burnout
  • cardiovascular diseases
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