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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides

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The advancements of technology have marginal effects in our life and
this
 trend becomes more significant with the help of the Internet. While some argue that using the Internet makes people isolated, others believe that it strengthens relationships. On the one side, it is admittedly that the misuse of social networks and other websites leads to loneliness which distracts users from the real world.
As a result
, especially children, who addicted to playing games, wasting time on websites become reluctant to share opinions with family members and in the future, they suffer from being alone.
That is
 why in the early ages of their upbringings, parents try to ban using electronic devices which has access to the Internet. On the other side, as it is available
in
Suggestion
on
 more devices and a myriad of people owns them increase accessibility which concludes spreading of it quickly. It is undeniable that particularly, social media makes communication easier and today a lot of people use it for making video calls in long distances. Whereas in the past commuting is needed in order to meet someone, today it is obtainable with virtual meetings.
For example
, parents have daily talks via Whatsapp or Skype with children who study in abroad and it makes family bonds strong.
Furthermore
, while sharing common interests in social media, subscribers make new friends and even after some period they become as close as family members. Being aware of private life with the help of social accounts makes people closer, because they exchange daily concerns, celebrate each other. To conclude,
besides
 the negative effects of using the Internet which damages the relationship between relatives, family members and friends, there are
also
 the positive consequences of
this
 trend as making communication easier and reachable.
Submitted by Narmin Agarahimova on

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