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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society

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Due to the advance in the technology, it is now possible to obtain an information around the globe.
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, the means of getting information are the media that enormously impacted our livelihood. There are several pros and cons of
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 highly tech community.
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 essay would
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, discuss how
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 it has made youth successful and
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, how it has been assets to delve for the criminal faster than before. On the one hand, the prime advantage of media is that increased number of lesser crime rates. When, the median is available for all the time, offenders are frightened up to attempt the law break.
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 would have helped a police Department to search faster for the offenders.
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, according to the USA crime department, 70% of the criminals are being found by the media due to high tech media.
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, nowadays, adolescences have shown a passion about the media that they do not want out to go for the career in the engineer or doctor field. Because of the popularity and the various opportunities to achieve accomplishments in the field.
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, as per the Australian media report, 80% of the adolescences in the Australia pursuing profession in the new channel sector due to the growing popularity. In conclusion, whatever is the situation at present, it's not handled with caution than surely, in the future, it perhaps ruin all the youngster's life than no one can resolve it.
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also help
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also helps
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 to keep informed the general public, including rural civilians who are unable to acquire the news decade ago.
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