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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Although
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 the pre-pared
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 is thought to be a great solution for the lack of the time for cooking in the high-speed life according to some opinions, other are convinced that it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I consider that the convince
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 can bring more health problems, even so it has a few advantages. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of consuming semi cooked meals.
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, it's by far cheaper to buy a frozen pizza or a pasta rather than to cook your own. As current research has shown that the price for convenience
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 is lower by 57% compared to the cost of the homemade dishes.
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, at the age of the globalization, many people have got less free time, as a consequence, they haven’t got the opportunity to cook
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, according to the latest survey, 45% of full-time worker would refuse from pre-pared
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, if their working day was shorter.
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, there isn’t necessary to store, buy and plan the ingredients for the individual dishes, while you buy almost the cooked meals.
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, despite upsides of the convenience
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 mentioned above
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I believe that people could face up with serious drawbacks. One potential problem is a health hazard from the semi cooked
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, as it contains the chemicals and preservatives. The latest publication of WHO (World Health Organization) has shown that one of the factors, which causes the cancer is consuming unhealthy, long-storage
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, eating frozen
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 can lead to the overweight, what is dangerous for the body. As an example, 67% of the USA teenagers suffer from the obesity, while they tend to eat only the fast-
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 or the convenience
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. To summarize, while there are minor advantages of pre-pared
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, I strongly believe that the disadvantages far outweighs them.
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