Doctors in many countries believe that people are not getting enough exercise. What might be causing this lack of exercise? What can be done to address the issue?

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Health officials almost everywhere, are of the view that exercise is not an essential part of people's lives these days.

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can be due to two factors.

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, in recent times, people have adopted an extremely sedentary lifestyle and are more driven towards achieving their professional goals. Financial stability at a competitive pace has become the most crucial aspect of their lives.

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majority

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the majority

of them are involved in the same rat race.

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, technological advancement in most of the highly developed nations has made humans increasingly lethargic.

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, household chores are usually carried out by

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machines, namely

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vaccum

the absence of matter

vacuum

cleaners, hands free

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the absence of matter

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cleaners, etc.

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, humans have started relying on immensely advanced and smart equipments for routinely activities, some of these include Alexa, remote operated furniture etc.

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, modes of transport used by people these days

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are, unfortunately

, a little too convenient, namely,

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cabs. Body movement is greatly restricted owing to all of these technological advancements. An effective way to reinforce physical fitness is to introduce more and more sports program in schools and universities.

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will

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enable the future generation to inherit similar healthy genes.

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, the

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generation may not adopt the habitual exercise routine

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they can definitely be made aware of its benefits through recitation of experiences from

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the older

generation. Students should be encouraged to volunteer at other events by providing yoga classes.

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, individual businesses must offer their employees with employment perks focused on health improvement

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as " tennis tables", "treadmill machine" etc.

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not only will motivate employees to utilise their break

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efficiently, but

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be re-energised for the upcoming deadlines. Their sense of passion for the job will be enhanced and their productivity will be

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, to sum up, including exercise in our workplace and schools, and increasing its awareness will reduce the detrimental effects of the current sedentary lifestyle caused by inheritance of artificial intelligence and materialism

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Doctors in many countries believe that people are not getting enough exercise. What might be causing this lack of exercise? What can be done to address the issue?

In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countrysid.