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Tourists cause more harm than good to local people and the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent years, travelling has been the
first
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 choice of preference for people who need a break from their current routine.
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However not
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However, not
 every traveller has followed the precautionary guidelines in the past few years, which has led to disturbing the locals in many ways.
This
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 essay will
further
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 throw a light on both negative and positive impacts of tourists in the local
community
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Firstly there
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Firstly, there
 are various types of travellers
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, the ones who travel for leisure, others might travel for research, volunteering work and many other activities.Many doctors prefer completing their internship and projects in different countries, which
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 help the locals in some ways.
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, the individual has to keep knowledge before visiting any place beforehand like the dislikes and likes of people, the tradition and culture.
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, in the past few years, many cases have been reported by the local
community
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 on how the tourist is disturbing the environment. Every
community
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 has their own set of rules and regulations,
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, Saudi Arabia does not permit women who do not wear (a cloak wore by traditional Arab Muslim women), alcohol and pork are strictly prohibited and will land the prosecutor in jail for not abiding by the laws. So, the tourist should be aware of the guideline and measure beforehand in order to avoid
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 circumstances. To conclude, I would strongly recommend travellers to adapt to the local environment and have adequate knowledge about the place they are about to visit,
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 will not just help the travellers but
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 the
community
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