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The Internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#internet
Since its development in the 1970s, the
Internet
 has become a key tool for obtaining
information
 and for communication all over the world. The
Internet
 has both advantages and
disadvantages
 but,
overall
, I believe the advantages are stronger than the
disadvantages
.
Firstly
, the
Internet
 has made work and social life much easier. Sending emails and using video conferencing in the workplace have made business quicker and more efficient.
For example
, in the past,
people
 often had to travel long distances for meetings and now they can video call
instead
.
Also
, the
Internet
 makes it easier to keep in contact with family and friends through email and social networking websites.
People
 can give friends and relatives their news quickly and easily.
In addition
, meetings, parties and social events for large groups of
people
 are easier to organise in
this
 way.
Finally
, finding out
information
 online is much quicker than visiting libraries or making expensive phone calls.
On the other hand
,
people
 claim the
Internet
 has
disadvantages
. Some
people
 say that the
Internet
 makes
people
 lazy.
For example
,
people
 now do lots of things online, like shopping and socialising, when it might be better for them to do these things in the 'real' world.
Furthermore
, the
Internet
 contains a lot of
information
 which is not correct.
This
 is because anyone can put anything they want on the
Internet
 and it is not always checked for accuracy or truth. Users need to be sure that the websites they look at are reliable sources of
information
. In conclusion,
although
 it has advantages and
disadvantages
, the
Internet
 has made life so much easier in so many ways, that, as long as
people
 know how to use it effectively, it can be an excellent tool.
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Examples
Remember to provide specific examples to support each advantage or disadvantage you mention to strengthen your argument further.
Balanced View
Try to explore a more balanced view in the argument by discussing the disadvantages in as much detail as the advantages to avoid a biased perspective.
Structure
Effective use of paragraphs and clear topic sentences that help in structuring the essay well.
Introduction & Conclusion
Successful introduction and conclusion that clearly express your overall stance on the topic.
Cohesion
Good use of connectors and transition phrases to ensure smooth flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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