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In some countries, people encourage students to find part-time jobs while some people don't. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
There is no doubt that earning while studying has many advantages. There are some people support acquiring a
job
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 as long with education, others oppose
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 due to some reasons. In my opinion, I strongly believe in former view because it has some merits.
Body paragraph 1
On the one side of the argument, it is sometimes thought students would focus only their academics
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 of getting a part- time
work
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.
This
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 is because engaging in the other activities might result in poor performance in the examinations.
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, these learners would suffer a lot as they could not show an excellent educational background in their adulthood and employability would slim.
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, in India, rarely, children have been allowed to
work
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by
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with
 both their parents as well as the teachers.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
nevertheless
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, opponents of the above mentioned argument point that joining as a trainee in some
work
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 would give a better
job
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 prospects when they become adult. In other word, having
an
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a
 hand on experience in the field of
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, could give a chance to successful.
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, nursing students often
work
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 as a care giver during their student period.
This
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 not only assist to earn money, but
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job
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 related skills.
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, I, firmly think that joining a small
work
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 along with studies is highly essential for the futuristic employees.
Conclusion
In conclusion, even though people have different opinion on whether to have a
job
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 along with studies. In my viewpoint, I think it is a great idea to get a
work
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 as well as education.

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