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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
due to
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 the rise in immigration jobs, an argument has come to some people's minds that these individuals should be obligated to
work
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 where they were trained;
while
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 others assume that they have the right to choose where they want to
work
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.
This
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 essay will analyze both views and I will indicate my agreement with the latter. On the one hand, the first group may consider the fact that professionals have to use facilities and investment; to become doctors, engineers, etc. and
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this
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 reason, they have to
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 in countries they used to
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.
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, a student, who gets a government scholarship to
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, has to repay
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 investment.
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, in Thailand, the doctor’s internship, which
study
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 in the fourth year of
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university, has to
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 in the local hospitals to pay back;
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, they are obligated to pay back the whole money in case of going abroad and using their license.
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, the second group has debated that human beings have the right to choose another country if they desire.
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, they believe that being trained in that place means not having to be stuck in it again.
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, the researchers show that more than 50% of students, who
study
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 in professional fields want to experience working in internationals.
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, the student have the right to pick their own though it will increase the quality of their life. In conclusion,
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 there might be convincing reasons for remaining where you were educated, I believe that forbidding individuals from working where they demand, is not humanistic and logical.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical flow in your argument by providing clear and concise topic sentences for each paragraph, followed by supporting details and examples that strengthen your main points. Avoid jumping abruptly from one idea to another without proper transitions.
task achievement
While you provided an introduction and conclusion, the main body paragraphs could be more developed. Elaborate on your examples by explaining how they support your argument. Be wary of overgeneralizing or making assertions without sufficient evidence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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