Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

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In modern day western
society one
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society, one
can easily become obese, as the availability of cheap and unhealthy
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is high.
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, many people desire to be healthy and slim and
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have chosen to follow special diets or exercise regimes so as to not become obese. Others believe,
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, that people should be better informed about today’s unhealthy lifestyles and the poor
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they are consuming before
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diets and regimes are taken into consideration. Personally, I agree that the unhealthy lifestyle of many people must be addressed before thinking about ways of losing weight through special diets. It has become habitual for people to cook using ingredients that have been pre-cooked or to which chemicals have been added.
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, several people consume a lot of microwave and fast
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, which are both easy to purchase and prepare, but are often fairly unhealthy. Due to the fact that it has become less popular to cook meals using fresh ingredients, people consume chemicals, taste intensifiers, salt and sugar without realising. By consuming
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that has been made by mass production, one no longer has to think largely about how a meal is prepared and can simply consume it without thinking about the ingredients. It seems logical that in order to lose weight effectively and over a long period of time, one has to learn to eat in a healthy way and to carry out sport on a regular basis. Learning how to cook with fresh ingredients is an important aspect of eating in a healthy way, and, by doing so, people can avoid eating
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that has been pre-made. If people do not understand
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concept, they will fall back into unhealthily habits after their diet is over. In conclusion, today’s unhealthy lifestyles as well as the poor quality
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consumed by people on a regular basis must be addressed before thinking about diets or exercise regimes. If people can combine exercise with wholesome eating habits, they will be happier and healthier.
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