Children are facing more pressure nowadays from an academic, social and commercial perspective. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?
There has been a discussion revolving around the
pressure
that children are facing nowadays. Some people believe that in today’s world kids
have to face more pressure
from an academic, social and commercial perspective. In this
essay, I will look into the causes of this
problem and will give some solutions to this
issue.
First and foremost, parents
' need for children's best academic results puts a lot of pressure
. Parents
usually do not understand how they put pressure
on kids
for their studies. For example
, being angry at kids
for a bad grade demotivates them to study even more and not only puts pressure
but also
creates a worse relationship with parents
. Secondly
, not fitting into social norms creates a fear of isolation. Kids
must act and even look by norms and social trends
so that they can be more socially free. For instance
, following fashion trends
and having the most stylish closet lets younglings have more friends than those who dress differently and have their own sense of style. Another cause of pressure
is created by the commercial perspective. The need to have items that are trending at the moment and the fear of not being up to date create pressure
and fear of missing out. This
can even lead to some psychological issues.
There are several solutions to this
problem. Educating parents
on how to talk with their kids
about difficult school issues could prevent kids
from academic pressure
. For instance
, students who know that they can always talk with their parents
about their educational results can reach even higher grades and get into even better universities. Influencers showing that not following trends
and creating one’s personal style has a positive impact would prevent kids
from social isolation. This
would give children more confidence and help release stress coming
because of their looks. Choosing not to follow Verb problem
apply
trends
and breaking normal standards created by society would also
help secure pressure
.
To sum up
, even though kids
are facing more pressure
from academic, social and commercial perspectives, there are still solutions to lower this
issue.Submitted by oimigle on
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