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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

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It is a known fact that the majority of the people want to have kids for family to be complete
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 Lately it is becoming increasingly common to have kids very late.
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 and the society. There are various causes for having kids late in the
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 means performing well in the work place and acquiring raises and promotions which might take a couple of years.
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, some people might want to spend as much as time possible exploring the world which might be difficult to do with kids.
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, climbing mountains will much easier without carrying an infant. Infertility plays a major role irrespective of gender, age and profession in recent times.A recent study shows that, there is a 20% increase in infertility among men and women over 35 years in the past 5 years. Having kids very late in the
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 might create a few impacts.One of which is we might not be able to communicate better as there will be a huge generation gap between us. The
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 would be we would have to work longer as we need to provide for them at least till they are independent. Research shows, for every year they delay in having a kid after 35 they add 2 more years in their employment. To recapitulate, due to reasons like financial stability, freedom to travel and infertility people decide to have kids late in their
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, the consequences include more generation gaps, and longer employment for the parent.
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