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It is possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as South Pole, do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that the faraway natural environments is becoming the attractive destination with the researchers and visitors. While I accept that experiencing in the remove natural environments can sometimes have a positive effect, I believe that they are more likely to have a harmful impact. On the one hand, there are some convincing reasons which indicate that exploring in the uncovered places is beneficial in some ways. The issue that the discoverers visit remote natural environments would give them fortunate opportunities to research about
diverse located ecosystem
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diverse, located ecosystem
the diverse located ecosystem
the diverse located ecosystem the diverse located ecosystem
 or put out predictions about weather events. It would be a fabulous step for our science foundation in the future.
Beside
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Besides
, the issue that choosing the uncovered destinations to have strange exploration would give
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 some certain advantages. They could figure out another area and spread their experience by comprehending located people’s
life-style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
lifestyles
, which could improve their living condition by enhancing
value
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the value
 of
located
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locating
 tourism.
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, I would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits. The issue that people discover the remote natural environments could lead to detrimental impacts for the located ecosystem. It would be the consequences of
tourism service
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tourism services
a tourism service
, people would make a trend that destroying the
faraway
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far away
 areas to establish modern infrastructure for suppling tourism. In Vietnam, people make powerful effect to keep Son Doong Cave out of intervening of some organizations which propose to establish slings there.
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, there is no guarantee that the rescue team will be present immediately when something goes wrong with the
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
trailer
 or the insurance will pay for the health loss.
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 but not less, the authorities haven’t introduced
law
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a law
the law
 which
prevent
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prevents
 visitors from throwing garbage or addressed green tax with vehicles to decline the emission from transportation here. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of approving to explore the remote national areas of passengers and researchers are more significant than the possible benefits.
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