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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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The era of development,
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 it, human life is higher. Since
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, the demand for costumes has been growing. Some
companies
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 believe that their staff should
dress
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 formally. Others value job quality over appearance. In my view, put on clothing, It all depends on where you
work
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss and express my view. There is no denying that excellence of quality over looks. There are many reasons for wearing comfortable. For one thing, when people
dress
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 in normal clothes, they will feel comfortable and relaxed. The consequence of
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 problem involves many factors especially the efficiency of
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.
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, they can earn money to improve their
companies
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. The most familiar example of
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 is technology
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 as Facebook. Their staff always wear T-shirts or shorts. But it is become the most social
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.
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, people said that ​​​​​​​​wearing ordinary clothing will affect images. It can
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 be argued that their employees should
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 smartly. The reason for
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 requested by
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 to demonstrate professionalism. Perhaps the most obvious result of that will be to create a standardized working environment. A better example of
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 can be provided by governmental agencies in Vietnam to show their respect.
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, these clothes can make their staff feel uncomfortable.
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, It is difficult to
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 effectively or at full capacity. From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that employees
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 smartly or quality of
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 above appearance. It depends on which
company
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 you choose,
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 as a technology
company
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 or a state-owned
company
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. You should comply with
company
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 laws
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coherence cohesion
Consider the essay's structure and ensure that there is a clear and logical flow to your arguments. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence, and your ideas should be developed and conclude coherently. Avoid abrupt changes in the narrative and make sure your conclusion summarizes your ideas effectively.
task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that you fully address all parts of the prompt. Provide a clear opinion and thorough development of your arguments. Both views should be discussed with an equal amount of detail and your own opinion should be supported with specific reasons and examples.
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