Most people do not care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent decades, some people think that there have been a variety of activities for
people worldwide which
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people worldwide, which
cause their ignorance
for
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to
of
the
environment
. I totally disagree with
this
statement and will give some ideas as below. On the one hand, people
have been raising
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have raised
their concerns for
this
issue through mass media
such
as television and online website.
First
,
media
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the media
act as incentives for both individuals and family to improve their knowledge about negative impacts of people to
environment
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an environment
which forces them to take steps to
interferce
come between so as to be hindrance or obstacle
interfere
in reality. In fact, by appearing in short entertainments talking about climatic issues
such
as
greenhouse effect
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the greenhouse effect
and gas emissions, these programmes ensure that individuals are
likely to aware
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likely aware
of the detrimental drawbacks of their daily work which are conducive to
environment
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the environment
.
Second
, there are some
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
programmers
caring about
climate including
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climate, including
new solutions and worldwide improvement.
For example
, it is easy for people to find some ideas to reduce rubbish which has been going to
ocean
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the ocean
every year.
As a result
, people have been having positive effects on the
environment
by reducing gas emissions to the lowest point.
On the other hand
, climatic issues
have been becoming
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have become
a big
concerns
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concern
in education of not only schools but
also
companies.
For instance
, schools require their students to plant trees everyday which can passively educate children to care for the green planet.
Moreover
, some companies, especially
big one
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the big one
organize
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organizes
competitions related to actions
such
as reusing products or selling old clothes to protect the Earth through their simple daily activities.
As a result
, people apparently have better ideas to
environment
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environmental
. In conclusion, I think that people are having various ways to care for
environment
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the environment
with supports of media and education.
Submitted by Andy on

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  • prioritize
  • immediate needs
  • connect with
  • distant
  • abstract
  • economic considerations
  • growing awareness
  • active participation
  • initiatives
  • movements
  • impacts
  • well-being
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