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Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#damage #governments #individuals
In the modern world,
environmental issue
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the environmental issue
 has been gaining worldwide attention and people’s opinion
differ
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differs
 from who should be responsible for that. While I understand that the individual can help alleviate environmental damage, the government should play a
more crucial
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most crucial
 role when addressing
this
 problem owing to their superior power Each person’s action can have an influence either directly or indirectly to the
environment
.
Firstly
, since more and more households own at least one private car for transporting, the total amount of carbon emission emitting from that will
also
 increase dramatically which will eventually lead to the ozone layer depletion. If some of them using public transport as an alternative vehicle, the carbon footprint would be significantly reduced.
Secondly
, a large amount of unrecyclable rubbish is dumped by families directly into the surrounding habitats, which takes millions of years for the Earth to decompose. If individual limits their garbage throwing to the
environment
, or especially pursuing the zero-waste lifestyle, the pressure on the landfill will be greatly minimized
On the other hand
, governments have the ultimate responsibility to mitigate the environmental problem corresponding to their granted power. The government can impose the green taxes that factories. Authorities are those people who were elected by the citizens to control a specific region or country and ensure the local inhabitants’ safety and well-being.
Therefore
, preserving the
environment
 is an inevitable task to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 that obligation or the natural disaster will happen and threaten people’s lives.
Furthermore
, by using their power to impose regulation on the current law, it can act as an effective deterrent against the uncontrollable littering.
For example
, green taxes can be applied to the
compani
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join
es who excessively emit exhaust fumes, forcing them to switch to a more environmentally-friendly system In conclusion, even though the individual needs to join hands to protect the
environment
, the governments are those people who must take action, by enforcing the law, to thoroughly resolve
this
 problem
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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