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Human society has made great technological progress in the last 100 years. Some people think this also has negative effects on our life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, we have witnessed significant changes in
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. While some believe that
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 technological developments have affected negatively on our life, I would argue that, whereas
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a technology
 might present some problems, it has improved our quality of life. Considering the negatives of
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, we are becoming over-reliant on
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 for almost every task without realizing it.
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, it is increasingly more common for a vast of majority of the youth to consistently spend the bulk of their time browsing their social network profiles to keep up with their friends’ status which discourage real interaction.
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, with the growth of robots and machines, the efficiency of a task has increased tenfold, and
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 is the reason why humans might be superseded by the
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. These days, even organizations prefer leading-edge
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 doing multitasking and productively than humans.
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, many people will, unfortunately, lose their jobs or even do not have ones.
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, the main advantages of
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 are that it has made significant breakthroughs in terms of communication and business. Concerning the former, people are now can communicate with the distancing friends or a person belonging to a different part of the world, which connect them even they are far from away. As for the latter, the advanced
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 the efficiency of a business process. Progress in implementing strategic
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 trends is helping them save time, money, and exchange faster.
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, sales and purchases are now facilitated and possibly worldwide, which allows businesses to buy raw materials with discounts or at reduced prices. In conclusion, I think that the positives of better communication and efficient business that come with the advancement of
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 outweigh the disadvantages of
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a shortage
 of jobs.
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