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Number of students studying languages at one university in the UK

The line chart provides key information about the
number
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 of
students
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 studying at one university in the UK from six different countries: French,
Spanish
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, German,
Chinese
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, Polish, and Arabic, between 1990 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the university attracted both
Spanish
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 and
Chinese
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students
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.
In addition
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, Both the
number
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 of
Chinese
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 and
Spanish
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 increased sharply during the
period
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,
however
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, the
number
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 of
Spanish
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students
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 was more than the
Chinese
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. French and German student numbers dropped,
while
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 Polish increased.
In contrast
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, the Arab
people
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number
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 remained the same
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
According to
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 what is shown, French
people
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 at the beginning of the
period
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 were the majority. Over the two decades, their
number
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 declined significantly, reaching around 210
students
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 in 2015.German
people
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 declined steadily throughout the
period
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, falling from approximately 255 in 1990 to 240 in 2015. Meanwhile, a significant increase in
Spanish
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students
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’
number
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, rising from 60 to just under 350
students
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, being the majority in 2015.
Also
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, a noticeable increase in the
number
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 of
Chinese
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 from 50 to just above 250. In 1995, Polish was the minority, but
then
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 they had a steady increase, reaching 50
students
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 in 2005,
this
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number
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 remained the same until 2010,
then
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 rose significantly to roughly 125 by the end of the
period
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. Arab
people
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 were 50 at the beginning of the
period
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,
then
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 declined until 2000,
after
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this
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 year they reached just above 100
students
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 in 2005, later the
number
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 of Arab
people
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 back to 50 in 2015.

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vocabulary
Try to use more varied vocabulary and precise terms to describe trends.
coherence
Improve the linking of sentences and ideas for better flow.
conclusion
Provide a clear conclusion summarizing the main trends for better completion.
content
Good attempt at summarizing the key trends in the data and using relevant figures.
organization
The structure is clear, with an introduction, body, and a separate summary of trends.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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