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spite of the adavances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry Why is this cause? What can be done about this problem?

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Hunger is still being a major threat to the earth, which have high innovations in the field of agriculture. In
this
 essay delineates the causative factors and the reasonable solutions for
this
 issue. To embark on, there are numerous reasons behind
this
 trouble.
To begin
 with bankruptcy was the one of the main reasons for
this
, which means debt is the lack of basic amenities like food, shelter etc.
Therefore
, the people who have in
this
 section is not capable to buy things at least to feed their essential needs due to their poor income
consequently
this
 leads them to starvation very easily.
For instance
, the Begger in the public places, mostly suffer with yearning due to their scarcity which means the lack of basic amenities.
Secondly
, the overpopulation leads to absence of cuisine in a nation due to
this
 resource are limited while the needy is unlimited.
Therefore
, if the number community is larger than the resources provided in a country so it is impossible to fulfil needs of each and everyone.
For example
, India is the largest
second
 populated country in the nature
also
 their resources are limited
this
 put them into the
second
 position in yearning death. There are
also
, some possible solutions. Regarding the
first
 causative factor, bankruptcy can be curtailed through providing free cost of snacks through the public distribution system for people who are below the bankruptcy line.
Next
, moving to the other important cause
that is
 overpopulation can be alleviated through establishing the measures to control the over society which is successfully maintaining in china. So it is possible to reduce the yearning through these two measures. Conclusively practicing the above affirmative strategies could be effectively abated the lust in the nature. It is hoped that the Government should take necessary steps to reduce
this issues
Suggestion
this issue
these issues
 within a time bound.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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