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"Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?".

#countries #dangers
In recent times
,
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,
developments in advanced nations have resulted in an abundance of climatic issues including global warming.
This
 essay will explore how
this
 problem can be tackled through strict
government
 policies for energy plants to decrease
pollution
, by enhancing public
transport
 and
awareness
 of people through media campaigns.
Firstly
, through
government
 policies for energy plants in order to reduce
pollution
,
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,
this
 problem can be curbed to a large extent.As
government
 regulations in terms of reduction in waste disposal by power plants, would almost certainly reduce the global warming.Take an example of Peru
,
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,
where by imposing strict laws on power stations by
government
 has led to significant reduction in
pollution
.
Thus
, local
government
 through effective policies can help decrease
this
 issue.
Secondly
,
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,
global warming can be curtailed to a large extent by promoting public
transport
.As by enhancing public
transport
 as opposed to self
transport
 will not only reduce the
pollution but
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pollution, but
also
 reduce the traffic problems.
For instance
,
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,
public
transport
 in Beijing has remarkably reduced the air
pollution
.
Hence
,
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,
enhancement of public
transport
 can likely result in the reduction of global warming.
Finally
,
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,
global warming can be tackled to a greater extent by
awareness
 programmes for people. As
awareness
 programmes broadcasted on popular media and mainstream literature can help reduce
this
 menace and it will benefit the mankind in the long run. To sum up
,
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,
I believe that global warming is indeed a grave problem across the world and I believe it can be curtailed through strict
government
 policies, by promoting public
transport
 and
awareness
 campaigns and
this
 practice should be done.
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