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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In the 21st century, it has been noted that the famous people like actor or sports person's lives are being interfered with the media to a great extent. The major two assertions come out of
this
 situation is that celebrity's
life
 must not be brought in front of the public through the media and other assertion is that interference of media in their
life
 is the cost that they are paying for being famous. In following paragraphs I will be discussing both views. According to me, everyone has the right to privacy, and it should not be interfered by the media. Being an actor or sports person their work like acting or sport should be broadcasted in front of common people not personal
life
. It is the same like a common individual have personal and professional
life
 where they do not have
confliction
 among their both lives. Celebrities should be provided with privacy in their personal
life
.
However
,
on the other hand
, the actors or sports people are the famous faces and they have a huge fan following which raises the interest of knowing about the things happening in the celebrity's
lifelife
a crease on the palm; its length is said by palmists to indicate how long you will live
lifeline
 inside the common public and media understands
this
 interest very well.
therefore
Suggestion
Therefore
 they always try to sneak into the celebrity's
life
 and reveal them in front of the common public.
This
 can be said as the price that celebrities are paying for the fame what they are getting. In a nutshell, every individual has the right of privacy it does not matter they are?, but the other dark side is
also
 that everything has the price in
this
 world to pay, it means the fame always comes with the disturbances in private
life
.
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