Many people say that we have developed in to a “throw-away society” because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To want do you degree do you agree with this opinion?

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It is said that people are tending to develop
in to
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into
a
throw - away
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throw-away
society, since human are discharging huge plastic bag and rubbish into the
environment
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which they cannot solve. From my perspective,
i
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I
toally
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totally
agree with
this
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statement. One the one hand, nowaday companies produce a huge
amout
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amount
of plastic bags for the market.
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is because most people
use
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it to package the commodities to trade easily, so people consume a tone of
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the
plastic bag into the
environment
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every year.
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, they tend to
use
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the
a
thing that just
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use
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uses
one only which
this
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can make
a
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apply
huge damage on
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the
environment.
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, they
use
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the
the
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apply
medical masks which are
disposible
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disposable
instead
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of using cloth mask, and if everyone
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use
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uses
5 medical masks for a day
this
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will lead to a huge amount of
watse
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waste
water
to human's garbage
On the other hand
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,
although
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people are fill up trash
everyday
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every day
, they can not give them a place to slove it. Since most companies
are just focus
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are just focusing
are just focused
on their profit and do not have awareness of their
responsibily
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responsibility
for the
environment
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. So they directly throw trash or raw
watse
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waste
water
into the rivers, lakes and
environment
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which is harmful
for
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to
both human and
environment
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.
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, according to
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the
newspaper that the Formosa company had thrown bad chemical into
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a
the
river which
cause
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causes
the death of million fishes in the middle area of Viet Nam In conclusion, I deem myself agree that people tend to throw - away society due to the bad chemical in the river and big garbage in the central of
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the
city. If
this
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problem cannot solve soon,
this
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trend is likely to cause more bad
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effect
affect
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effect
on
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the
environment and people's life
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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