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Write a letter to your supervisor requesting to change your work schedule. In your letter: - explain current schedule; - why you want to change it; - say what kind of schedule you need.

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Dear Mr Martin I am writing you to request a change to my shift schedule from 5-12 o'clock  to 12 -17 o'clock. I underwent knee reconstruction surgery and
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 daily physiotherapy at the local clinic from 9 to 11 a.m. I have annexed the medical documents supporting my request. I have worked for  Ozod for four years  and I have always been an exemplary employee, with excellent performance reviews. I'm hopeful we can come to an agreement
that is
 beneficial for both parties. Yours sincerely, Maxmudov Akbarshoh
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Task Achievement
To enhance task achievement, provide more details about the impact of your current schedule on your daily life and explicitly explain how the desired change will suit your needs better. It helps to give a clearer picture of your situation to the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
Though your letter has a clear structure, consider using connectors or transitional phrases between sentences and paragraphs to improve the flow of information. For example, phrases like 'Considering this,' 'In light of,' or 'Therefore,' could seamlessly connect the paragraphs, enhancing coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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