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Because of falling birth rates and better healthcare, the world’s population is getting steadily older and this trend is going to cause serious problems for society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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endency of falling birth rate could be seen in many countries excpetialy in industrialized. That happens for a number of reasons,
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 and or some couples do not have enough time for children up brining.
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 trend, the world’s population is constantly ageing, creating new challenges for society and the government.
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, as the birth rate decrease and the number of young people who are able to work
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 decline the government get less tax than it is needed.
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, the government may increase taxation or change its budgetary policy by cutting funding of different spheres. At the same time, ageing of the world’s population boost development of health
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 more money on income support and better medical
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, better health
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 leads to a longer life span. That may create some problems for young people. To say that, old specialists who could be retired still work and do not allow younger people to get
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, the young generation usually takes
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 of old families’ member.
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, if governmental funding of education is cut in order to subsidize health
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 service, those who want to study in the university do not have enough or have no financial support. In
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 way, young people spend a lot of time working that affect their education. To conclude, I agree that the ageing of the world’s population has crucial consequences for society.
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, it helps to develop a social sphere and quality of life.
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, older employers could share their working experience and teach young people.
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