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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the current scenario, it is mundane to see the population using cars to commute from one place to another.
However
, using these motor engines have more benefits as compared to drawbacks. Travelling to places which cannot be reached by foot. With the development of cars, going to distant places has become quick and comfortable.
For instance
, in the cases of emergency, one can reach the medical in
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ew minutes if they own a personal machine.
Moreover
, it is a one-time investment to buy a motor and has low maintenance.
Thus
,
instead
 of borrowing the vehicle from others, it is better to own one. Cars are a bit expensive but once they are bought, the owner has less burden in paying for extra expenditure. The negative aspect of cars is the increasing pollution levels of the cities. Delhi, the capital of India has been ranked 15, in the most polluted cities index, by the UNO. People prefer using cars over public transport as they find their own conveyance more comfortable.
Therefore
, the country is facing low revenue from the transport department.
Moreover
, cars are expensive and every pocket does not allow, but the people try to imitate each other and buy these luxuries. To conclude, the advantages of cars overweigh the disadvantages. Having a car in contemporary time is common and the comforts and security it provides, cannot be neglected.
On the contrary
, some believe that having an automobile would increase pollution and reduce the usage of public transport.
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