Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

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the rapid developments being made in the science
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many products are being launched every new moon. A group of people opine that there is a trend to purchase modern electronic
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others deem
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thought as a waste of money. I reckon that
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trend has a myriad of benefits and I will substantiate my view in the following paragraphs
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an example. People learn throughout their entire
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and they constantly improve their knowledge and
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. First of all, owing to the increase in trade many products are easily available in the market.
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mass production skills, these gadgets are not only available at a
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amount but
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available in abundance.
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, as a hobby, many children purchase these gadgets to stay updated with technology.
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not only communication has increased but
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a sense of security has increased.
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a recent survey conducted in Pune revealed that employees felt more comfortable
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talking to their kith and kin during office breaks.
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purchasing new gadgets and staying up-to-date has its merits there are certain disadvantages as well.
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with, as the import of these
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increases the economy of a nation decreases.
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, not only does pollution increase but
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the raw
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needed to manufacture these goods are getting depleted at a faster rate. To illustrate, a recent survey conducted in India states that the amount of pollution has increased by 20%
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the increased sales
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electronic
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this
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, a lot many toddlers are facing loneliness and other health issues as they prefer to stay isolated. To recapitulate,
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trend of purchasing goods has many advantages as compared to its
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and it is best to purchase these
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to stay
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and advanced in today's time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • status symbol
  • financial burden
  • obsession
  • impulsive
  • consumerism
  • sustainability
  • e-waste
  • environmentally friendly
  • second-hand market
  • repairability
  • upgradability
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