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Some people believe public libraries are not important for people, others disagree about this statement. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Some people think that public libraries are not significant benefits for people, while others think that the advantages outweigh the drawbacks. In
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 essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and give my own point of view.
Body · 1
In well-developed countries, there is at least one library in a community.
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 is because citizens need to read books or search for some information from reference books.
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, there are many people to read books in my country. Sometimes when they need to borrow a popular book, they need to make an appointment and even wait for a few months.
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,
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 means libraries are necessary for many communities.
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, from reading books, people can gain knowledge which can help them enrich their
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, if someone loves drawing,
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, he can take out books from libraries.
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 can make him learn more about it and make our
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 become meaningful and valuable.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, some people think
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 not really important for our
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, because they believe that
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overnment should allocate the recourse to other
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, like
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edical system. In the wake of the elderly population increases. Many citizens need to wait for a long period to see a specialist doctor.
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, they expect that if a government become less to contribute libraries
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than recourse should be allocated to medical care field.
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, some people do not like reading books. The evidence is some people do not visit the library in their whole
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, they tend to believe that libraries are not benefits towards our
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Conclusion
In conclusion, while some people think that they do not love reading and the medical systems are more significant rather than the libraries.
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, I strongly believe that we need libraries
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 because many people like to read books and it can enrich our
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 by learning something new.

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