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Some people believe that residents are responsible for the place where they live to be clean and tidy. Others believe that government is the responsible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Lately, there has been an ongoing debate about who should take duty to clean places. It is believed by some that it is
government
 roles and responsibilities to keep residential areas clean, while others protest
this
 idea. It is important to admit that both views have their own benefits. In
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society in the upcoming paragraphs. Examining the former opinion, some believe that people should clean their living and surrounding areas by themselves for many noteworthy reasons. The most common
one
 is to keep privacy in the house. By
this
,I mean that
one
 can clean his or her house from inside whenever time allows. Another
one
 is the moral duty of
one
 to keep the clean world to avoid many problems, like health issues, worst smells or insects from wastage.
On the contrary
, despite the above arguments, many people choose to think that
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overnment is only responsible to perform
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 cleaning tasks.
Firstly
, people are expecting
this
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overnment as many argue that they are paying heavy taxes to get basic needs. According to research done by the newspaper, Tokyo Times, about 30% of income is paid to
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overnment as a Tax in the developing countries.
Secondly
, public servants are
also
 responsible for people's health which could be affected by unclean places.
For instance
, they should make arrangement to collect garbage every day as it could spread health problems. To put it succinctly, while many people vary their opinion about keeping places clean, I strongly believe that issue of the clean city is sensible and easily tackled if
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overnment and concerned departments monitor the process and enforced the required laws.
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