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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In America, the youngsters have been imposed some restrictions these days. They are asked to remain indoors in the late night, unless they go out with a mature person. In my opinion, I strongly support
this
 because
this
 can result in poor grades in schools and
safety
 reasons. The primary reason why I think it is good for the teens to stay inside their homes is that, when they spent their nights on roads, they hardly get the sufficient amount of time for preparing the classroom lessons.
Consequently
, they score poor in academics, which in turn damage their educational prospectus.
Similarly
, since they could not sleep properly at nights lead some physical disturbances: headache, anxiety,and fatigue,
also
 negatively impact on their concentration.
For instance
, many doctors adivise that students to sleep adequately, at least 6 hours per day. Another point here is that the
safety
 issue,
in other words
, during night time, it has been observed that many anti-social activities are carried out. Due to
this
, the teenagers may end up in some dangerous scenarios and be unknowingly victimised.
For example
, many robbories, drug peddling and hit and run crimes happen under the dark,
however
, if they are escorted by adults, these
safety
 issues could be limited since the senior person has some experience and know how to handle the situation more precisely than the youngsters.
Thus
, it is clear that when going outside in the late night make sure adults are accompaning. By the dint of the above-mentioned points, low scores in schools and
safety
 concerns, are resulted when the young adluts spend their nights outdoor. I firmly believe that they should not be allowed to roam, unless the presence of the senior. It is higly recommended that avoid any situation, which may endanger the life of anyone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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