Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think the modern world gets people more independent on each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays the
world
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is more broad, everyone is connected in some way, the social economic status of the
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improve
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low middle income countries can give their child everything they want.
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why there are some group that think we became more dependet on each other while others think that ,
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, we became more independet. Personally I believe that the
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is more dependent thanks to
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.
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of all, the group who believes we are becoming indepedent argue that nowadays you don´t need to ask for advice to prepare some things ,that you can just google it and you will have a tutorial teaching you how to cook, how to sew, how to swim, etc.
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thanks to the tutorials o instructions, you can learn many things without going to school or interact with other people. They believe human interaction is reducing now that we computers and internet,
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one of the main reasons they believe we are more indepent.
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I believe that
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due to
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we depent even more on each other,
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: In the tutorials, there is someone who did it for you, even is it is online there is still human interaction. I think with the social media that dependent of approval of the mass is even stronger, people follow trends, they seek for likes,
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the ultimate confirmation of approval in the social media society. That´s why the
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depends more on each other, every action of a person, if it´s become viral, can trigger movements and change the
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for good or bad.
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, regarding if the
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is more dependent or independent, one group can say that
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make us more indepent that we can do everything that we want by ourselves, but I believe ,
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, that because of
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we are more dependent on each other because we seek for approval.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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