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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives
It is undeniable that Scientific discoveries have facilitated human life.
This
,
according to
 some individuals, should be the main purpose of
such
 developments. It seems to me that it might be the case and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the major motivation for scientists to seek achievements ranging from transportation to AI is public convenience. By
this
, we mean that there is always a necessity which brings about a movement to address leading to development in a specific area. A telling example is the invention of the telephone being because of people's need to communicate remotely. A second factor that makes the scholars' ultimate goal to be society's comfort is
the
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monetary reasons. It is obvious that money is playing an essential role in everyone's life and scholars are no exception.
This
 means they tend to dedicate most of their time and effort to matters that are of interest to people, significant of which, is their welfare. an example to illustrate
this
 is the amount of time and energy that has been put into the development of smartphones enabling individuals to call, photograph and surf on the internet with only one device making their lives more convenient. Admittedly, I agree with those who argue that science must be in the service of other crucial issues
such
 as addressing environmental pollution.
However
, tackling
such
 problems is in
human'
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 interest as well.
To conclude
, it seems reasonable that the researcher's main purpose
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 improve people's lives improvements along considering that all other subjects are
also
 for humanity's welfare.
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The essay clearly addresses the topic with a pertinent introduction and conclusion.
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Provision of relevant examples, especially the inventions of the telephone and smartphones, effectively supports the argument.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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