The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is undeniable that Scientific discoveries have facilitated human life.

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some individuals, should be the main purpose of

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developments. It seems to me that it might be the case and I will explain why in

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, the major motivation for scientists to seek achievements ranging from transportation to AI is public convenience. By

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, we mean that there is always a necessity which brings about a movement to address leading to development in a specific area. A telling example is the invention of the telephone being because of people's need to communicate remotely. A second factor that makes the scholars' ultimate goal to be society's comfort is

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monetary reasons. It is obvious that money is playing an essential role in everyone's life and scholars are no exception.

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means they tend to dedicate most of their time and effort to matters that are of interest to people, significant of which, is their welfare. an example to illustrate

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is the amount of time and energy that has been put into the development of smartphones enabling individuals to call, photograph and surf on the internet with only one device making their lives more convenient. Admittedly, I agree with those who argue that science must be in the service of other crucial issues

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as addressing environmental pollution.

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, tackling

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interest as well.

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, it seems reasonable that the researcher's main purpose

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improve people's lives improvements along considering that all other subjects are

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for humanity's welfare.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

crucial role
technological advancements
medical discoveries
life-changing inventions
innovations
solutions to human problems
enhancing quality of life
improvement of healthcare
transportation
communication
agriculture
energy sectors
eradication of diseases
prolongation of life expectancy
global challenges
climate change
overpopulation
food security
developed world
underprivileged communities

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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

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