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Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Nowadays, it is noticed that a plethora of countries
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 striving hard to develop themselves economically and
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 working to maintain pristine surroundings.Few people opine that it is possible for a
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 to achieve success economically along with maintaining of tidy environment.
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,there are people who oppose the above thinking. In my opinion, a
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 economical
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 is proportional to the surroundings in which we are living.
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, many perplexed diseases can be avoided by proper maintenance of the surroundings, which makes an individual work for their
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 with a healthy lifestyle concurrently.
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, we often notice that hazardous effects are caused due to air and noise pollution which is making a person monotonous and ultimately, affecting his work. Economical
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 is associated with providing jobs and basic needs to the needy.
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, by maintaining the surroundings and roads pristine a
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 can attract foreigners, which adds a humongous earning in our
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's economical
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. In my view, it is possible for a
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 to look after the economical growth along with clean surroundings. The
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 should provide jobs for the needy to clean the surroundings every day.
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, there should be a law of not throwing waste on the roads. To illustrate, people should be charged if they use the road to throw the garbage or any waste material.
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, the government of a
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 should arrange dustbins in each colony.
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, there should be people to whom the government should assign to pick up the garbage from each house. To conclude, by implementing
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ew incumbent rules, a
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 can progress in maintaining pristine surroundings.
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, it
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 helps people to live a fit life and focus more on work which impacts on the economical
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 of a
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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