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Crimes and other kinds of information on television and newspaper have adverse consequences. This kind of information to be restricted to be shown in media. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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The crime rate is growing at an alarming rate in all parts of the
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. And its broadcast on television and newspapers has resulted adversely on a common man's psychology. Here, some people suggest that these kinds of disturbing crime-related news should be bared to be telecasted on any public platform. I definitely agree with the given opinion, for the mental well-being of the citizens
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some kind of rules and restrictions must be imposed on broadcasting media.
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 with, some hideous crime news like rape or murders affects mentally on any individual. When a person sees live telecast of these crimes, with some disturbing images or visual they get terrorised.
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, it is too disastrous for children to watch
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 news on television or in newspapers. Because
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 at an early age
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 kind of news might make them feel insecure and that innocence of a child might get lost. In fact, some children get so affected that they themselves get involved in some criminal activities like bullying.
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, for the mental happiness of a nation,news telecast should be regulated.
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, criminal news is
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 important for our general awareness and get updates in the due time. People get to know within seconds what is happening around them and in the
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 through these kinds of media only. They are considered to be the trusted source for getting any of information.
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, the
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 came to know about the horrible terrorist attack on
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 Trade Centre at New York through news channels and newspapers only which ,eventually allowed other nations to give a helping hand to the U.S.A.
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, restricting the telecast might lead to less or no information about the
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 on a real-time basis. In conclusion, despite the benefit of getting updates with the
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 or local news, I feel that media needs to redesign their broadcasting methods in a
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 a way that it would not hamper the nation's psychology and yet aware the audience about the wrongdoings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitize: To make someone less likely to feel shock or distress at scenes of cruelty or suffering by overexposure to such images.
  • Sensationalism: The use of exciting or shocking stories at the expense of accuracy, to provoke public interest or excitement.
  • Media Ethics: Principles and standards of conduct relating to the role and responsibilities of press and broadcast professionals.
  • Perception: The way in which something is regarded, understood, or interpreted.
  • Ignorance: Lack of knowledge or information.
  • Balance in Reporting: Presenting both sides of an issue or argument to provide a fair understanding.
  • Preparedness: A state of readiness, especially for unexpected events or emergencies.
  • Social Learning Theory: A theory that suggests people learn from observing others, including the behaviors, attitudes, and outcomes of those behaviors.
  • PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder): A mental health condition triggered by experiencing or witnessing a terrifying event.
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