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Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
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 contemporary era, with the advancement of technology, social media is gaining momentum. there are manifold advantages of
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 phenomenon,
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, it has some darker side too.
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 with its advantages, social media helps people in many aspects of life.
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 and foremost, Owing to its easy accessibility, individuals can connect with others regardless of their location and they can update themselves not only with local but
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 with international affairs.
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this
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, many individuals can share their skills on
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 platform and gain popularity all over the world. To cite an example, many youngsters become famous because of social media. Apart from
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, myriad adults started advertising their products with the help of
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 platform.
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, they can earn an ample amount of money and improve their living standards.
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, there are few disadvantages to these platforms. Many juveniles prolonge in front of the computer or smartphones which cause several health issues to them.
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, in a recent article, I have read that more than 60% of disciples allegedly have been suffering from obesity and diabetes because they glued to the electronic devices for a longer time.
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 to
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, they are wasting their precious time and
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 of utilizing it in recreational activities, they are confined to their rooms and become isolated.
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, the majority of youth suffering from depression and some of them commit suicide. To conclude, I believe that,
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 internet social media has brought immense benefits to society, there are some drawbacks which we need to take care of in order to develop a healthy and bright future.
Submitted by Neel Patel on

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