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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the word is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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There is no doubt that nowadays the
problem
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 of global warming is more acute than ever. There are numerous reasons and there are certain measures to be taken to resolve the
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. One of the main causes of the
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 is the huge emission of toxic greenhouse fumes, that various cars, trucks, motorcycles and other means of transport produce on a daily basis.
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, one vehicle produces almost nine kilograms of carbon dioxide every day.
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 an expense not only causes irreparable harm to the animals, people and vegetation
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 but significantly contributes to global warming. To tackle
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 issue, it’s crucial to reduce the usage of gasoline cars and start using electric ones.
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 measure will help to contend with global warming within the shortest possible period of time. Another reason is that in the majority of
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 the work of factories isn’t limited,
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 venomous ejections occur becoming a cause of global warming every second. Manufacturing and other industries produce emissions resulting from the burning of fossil fuels, which is a case in point. The way forward could be to issue some laws that would regulate the frequency of exhalation in order to decrease the amount of contaminating gases causing global warming. In conclusion, mankind is able to improve the ecological situation and prevent global warming by well-organised actions. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
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 lies with the government, which can quickly and cost-effectively dispose of
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 without considerable losses and
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task achievement
Ensure that paragraphs are fully developed with detailed explanations and examples. While you have mentioned key causes and measures, providing more depth and examples would enhance your task response.
coherence cohesion
Consider connecting ideas more smoothly between sentences to improve cohesiveness. While your essay is generally well organized, improving the flow of ideas can provide a clearer logical structure.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the argument and summarizing effectively.
task achievement
You have identified key causes of global warming and proposed solutions, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.
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The examples of vehicle emissions and factory emissions are relevant and strengthen your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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