IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Cyber-bullying and cybercrimes are seen to be on the rise today. What are the causes for this? What are the solutions for this problem?

#cybercrimes #rise
Technological advancement has made us do everything remotely,
thus
 the increase in cybercrimes doesn't come as a surprise. Apparently, the significant increase in cyber-bullying and cyber crimes has certain reasons around it and possible solutions. The notable reasons would be a lack of awareness within people about these crimes and no proper channel to report
such
 hefty issues to the government. Individuals using online banking don’t understand the need for setting a difficult password, logging out every time and to identify a scam or a scammer. In the case of cyber-bullying, Public doesn't know any trustworthy way to address their harassment, they are concerned about the identity being revealed as it just adds fuel to the fire.
For example
, A recent study suggests that most of the female users face online harassment but they just ignore as it could bring limelight on them when reported. Possible solutions could be educating the general public about online crimes involving finances. Strict rules should be imposed on the companies in the finance sector to create awareness on crime to its customers. Here, television and newspaper ads would be the best way to reach the
last
 mile. All the online social-networking or search engine platforms should have a simple method to detail bullying in a click to the police officials or a representative. It should allow the person to hide their identity and be contacted only when legislative action is required. To conclude, computerized attacks cannot be voided out but when the government handles the offence more efficiently, it could definitely be controlled to a large extent.
Also
 creating awareness and providing them with an easier way to report abuses will help people identify any cyber scams and be preventive in future.
Submitted by gowthami.njuly22 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: